Would you comment on my poem, “Super-Natural”?
I was sitting outside a coffee shop one day in the drizzle, watching the finches eat my crumbs.
Please tell me if you like it, and what it says to you. And anything you might be able to add.
Super-Natural
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Bird on a blast of coke
Clear amid all the smoke
Our mutual gaze slows down time
Pass judgment on friend of foe
Ignorant to secrets you hide
Ignorance and bliss as you fly
Maturing our minds is a crime
When slapped and spat on from high
Curiosity sought evolution
Fungus offered solutions
Awareness, a gained compromise
Gave meaning to good and gruesome
Talk spheres to stick men on paper
Old man takes a child and rapes her
The victims are never the wise
Wake now or be put to sleep later
Empowered when blood is spilled
Demons confused with your guilt
Everything returning full circle
When identical life is built
Adolescent humanity grows
Respect and unity flows
Mother is eternally fertile
As only God and I know
Wow…what I can I say…I don’t undersatnd any of it…but it is really good.
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